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Wild and Millie have such a rich relationship. I like how he meets her where she’s at, but also gently nudges her along. Her revelations always feel like her own, but also reached not without his attentive engagement.

And I agree with Julie, this line made me smile. Had to go back a few times to taste it again. “The falling sensation was interrupted abruptly by periods of stillness like stepping out of a hurricane into a library.”

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I'm happy the relationship between these two feels real to you. It's evolved in my mind quite a lot since I first introduced her. Thank you for reading and commenting, friend. I appreciate you so much.

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Echoing Kimberly's comment here and that of Julie, who both express how I felt listening to this far more accurately than I could have expressed.

The shifting viewpoint again works so well here, Ben. Love getting Millie's thoughts and this revelation moment was excellent:

"Just then, she felt something very strong pass through Wild. The expression on his face didn’t change and there was no other tell, but she felt a dark surge of something moving fast just below the surface. There was a connection between them now that hadn’t been there before."

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Thank you, Nathan. It’s always squishy shifting between perspectives and I’m ever watchful of getting carried away and being God inside everyone’s mind at once. It’s such an easy and ultimately lazy thing to do that I often don’t catch these trespasses until the second edit.

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We've had this conversation before I think, but I do so love close third-person. I can appreciate that it requires diligence to not slip into omniscient mode, though.

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Thirding Kimberly! I've really come to adore their bond, and felt especially proud of both of them in this episode ❤️

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Thank you, Chloe. ❤️

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These chapters are just flying by now!! Exciting new twists

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Thanks, Teyani.

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Love where this is going! There are great examples of top-down businesses that shifted to cooperative ownership. E.g., John Abrams writes about it in "The Companies We Keep." He's a founder of South Mountain Company, builders on Martha's Vineyard.

"The falling sensation was interrupted abruptly by periods of stillness like stepping out of a hurricane into a library." -- another signature Wakeman simile. 😊

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I’m glad you like the direction, Julie. Thanks so much for being such a generous reader. Happy New Year!

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There's a lot to consider in this chapter. I like how it ends.

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Thanks, Chip.

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